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Post by Bahlum on May 15, 2005 16:32:50 GMT -7
This is the most recent stuff that I've done. www.geocities.com/jshelzer/johnnewcomics.htmlPlease critique away, I would like opinions, vicious and unadulterated opinions. I'll post some of my other things later in the week once I get it reduced/scanned in. John btw, the webpage is just a stock template, I'll likely make something more original eventually. Don't bother searching the rest of the site as it is empty right now. |
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Post by G. Gerald Garcia on May 15, 2005 21:46:51 GMT -7
John,
Overall, considering you haven't drawn in five years, good work. You're on the right track.
Re:character designs- it looks like you had more fun doing the Jabberwocky-dragon thing than the winged girl.
Re:Dull layouts. Variations in your shot/framing choices would have helped. There was one page with 3 extreme close ups. I like to see the story being told.
Re-affirming establishing shots on every page is a good rule. We want to see where the characters are in relation to the environment and each other.
Re: Colors- for a first attempt, not bad. Still work out a color pallet ahead of time. The jeans on WG and BG sky color is too similar, same case with the helicopter.
Did you use reference on the chopper, and flight suit?
Still, good work.Keep at it!
GarSeeYa!!!
Note: Northern Edge was the company founded by Ed Kang and Erik Ko. Ed is still around Calgary.
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Post by CogNoman on Jun 19, 2005 7:33:19 GMT -7
Yeah, I'm a huge fan of that monster-thing's design, and the idea of having its wings bubble up and pop out was very strange and cool. And the panels on the bottom of page 6 were a nifty idea too.
Vicious, unadulterated opinions?
Um, the one thing I can think of is that the faces seem a little plain to me - kind of like faces that you'd see in television cartoons from the early 80's. My guess is that they probably had a bit of energy and life in the pencilling stage, but the inking kind of sucked it out of them.
I reeeeally like that monster, though! Maybe it would be cool to have a comic with nothing but those monster things in it.
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